Sunday, April 15, 2007

Q. I've read scripts where the writer will break up a line for and capitalize a sound, such as

A grenade

EXPLODES

beside Desmond.

Also seen a few that break up the line for a verb:

Tony

swings

his bat.

Okay, white space is good. But this is overdoing it.

My rule is: one line is one shot, or sometimes, one action:

Jimmy races over to the third ladder just as-

-a KNIGHT comes over the top, clambers up on the parapet-

Jimmy races up to shield-bash him as-

-the Knight slashes down at him. Jimmy blocks - CLANG! - but in moments he's fighting for his life against a blizzard of sword blows. Jimmy's good, but the knight is a pro.

Caz runs up just as -

-the Knight gets his sword point under Jimmy's breastplate and THRUSTS.

Jimmy staggers, in shock and pain.

Each line is a new "virtual camera angle." When I write Jimmy races I'm hoping you'll see him coming head on as he runs up. A KNIGHT comes over the top is the reverse angle. And so on.

I do capitalize sound effects, special effects, and any action I want to be sure the reader doesn't miss. Don't overdo it, though. If everything's in caps, they lose their emphasis and you're just shouting.

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