I used to critique scripts for a fee, but ever since I got too busy, I've been sending people to my friend
Victoria Lucas. She's a development exec I worked with back in my indie production days.
Now she's hanging out her shingle on the Internet.
Victoria is one of the extremely rare development people who can tell you what's broken in your script. Most readers will give you notes like "I wanna like the main character more" or "the scene on page 60 drags." She will tell you, "your main character needs a more compelling opportunity, problem or goal so that we'll care about him," or "you haven't properly set up the stakes on page 23, so your scene on page 60 drags."
Victoria is currently
grossly undercharging for her services ($185 for 3-4 pages of notes and a telephone call, $350 for longer notes and more follow-up), so take advantage of her before she wises up and charges what she's worth.
Labels: script analysis, story consulting