right off the bat, the author says "He enters Mr. Covey’s office. We see Mr. Covey behind his desk"...Who is 'he', big mistake not using the actual name, and 'we see'. Unless he is a highly sought after scribe and can toss in camera direction right away...well, I think not
What a surprise. Maybe if he started at a $1 he'd have a few idiots bidding.
ReplyDeleteright off the bat, the author says "He enters Mr. Covey’s office. We see Mr. Covey behind his desk"...Who is 'he', big mistake not using the actual name, and 'we see'. Unless he is a highly sought after scribe and can toss in camera direction right away...well, I think not
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